So well I zei I was giving up on writing earlier this morning (my time but the truth is that all of u told me wonderful things and it made me feel a little better so I decided to give it another shot...I hope u like it =)
The pain. When she woke up all she could feel was the pain within her. Every part of her body was aching, she didn’t dare to shut her eyes open. She could feel the rough cotton blanket beneath her, where was she? Her head spun even with her eyes closed, her stomach was sending the leftover of last night to her throat. She flinched at the sting pain she felt in her stomach. She opened her eyes but everything was a blur, she felt even dizzier and when she tried to stand up for the bathroom, her knees failed on her and she fell down volgende to the bed in a carpet that now was stained door her vomit.
She stood up again this time meer slowly as she gained balance over her body. The light was hurting her eyes.
“Where am I?” She felt a hand behind her and her eyes snapped open. The hand was in her wrist and she knew that hand.
“Are u ok?” She turned down to see him. He was curled in the sheets, fortunately he was wearing pajamas, the same as her. Stumbling she sat volgende to him. Her head was banging, she remembered everything but her headache didn’t allow her to think. He sat up volgende to her and cupped her face with his hands.
“Lisa?” She wasn’t even staring at him. “Lisa? Please say something.” Harshly she turned her face away. She stood up and threw up over the carpet for the seconde time. Embarrassed she went inside the bathroom, she made her way grabbing from the walls to keep her standing.
He immediately followed. He could hear the sounds of an insanely sick woman that came from the bathroom. After the third time she had thrown up, he didn’t hear any noise at all.
“Lisa? Lisa? Open up!” He knocked lightly. He went to his room and took the duplicate of every key in his house. He ran to the bathroom and tried 5 keys before getting the right one, he opened up and let out a gasp. She was on the floor, trembling, shaking. He didn’t know if that was a seizure. He ran to his bedroom and called 911.
“I need an ambulance.” He gave his address and then ran volgende to Lisa. He had read enough times that when someone seizure they needed to hold their jaws so they didn’t chop their tongues so that’s what he did. With a trembling woman in a floor covered in vomit, he held her jaws and wished for the ambulance to come faster.
So should I give it a try again... Mmmh notice I will postpone all of my other fics but I will write them. I just felt that they were so badly written that it bugged me a lot
But meanwhile this one, shall I continue it?.
The pain. When she woke up all she could feel was the pain within her. Every part of her body was aching, she didn’t dare to shut her eyes open. She could feel the rough cotton blanket beneath her, where was she? Her head spun even with her eyes closed, her stomach was sending the leftover of last night to her throat. She flinched at the sting pain she felt in her stomach. She opened her eyes but everything was a blur, she felt even dizzier and when she tried to stand up for the bathroom, her knees failed on her and she fell down volgende to the bed in a carpet that now was stained door her vomit.
She stood up again this time meer slowly as she gained balance over her body. The light was hurting her eyes.
“Where am I?” She felt a hand behind her and her eyes snapped open. The hand was in her wrist and she knew that hand.
“Are u ok?” She turned down to see him. He was curled in the sheets, fortunately he was wearing pajamas, the same as her. Stumbling she sat volgende to him. Her head was banging, she remembered everything but her headache didn’t allow her to think. He sat up volgende to her and cupped her face with his hands.
“Lisa?” She wasn’t even staring at him. “Lisa? Please say something.” Harshly she turned her face away. She stood up and threw up over the carpet for the seconde time. Embarrassed she went inside the bathroom, she made her way grabbing from the walls to keep her standing.
He immediately followed. He could hear the sounds of an insanely sick woman that came from the bathroom. After the third time she had thrown up, he didn’t hear any noise at all.
“Lisa? Lisa? Open up!” He knocked lightly. He went to his room and took the duplicate of every key in his house. He ran to the bathroom and tried 5 keys before getting the right one, he opened up and let out a gasp. She was on the floor, trembling, shaking. He didn’t know if that was a seizure. He ran to his bedroom and called 911.
“I need an ambulance.” He gave his address and then ran volgende to Lisa. He had read enough times that when someone seizure they needed to hold their jaws so they didn’t chop their tongues so that’s what he did. With a trembling woman in a floor covered in vomit, he held her jaws and wished for the ambulance to come faster.
So should I give it a try again... Mmmh notice I will postpone all of my other fics but I will write them. I just felt that they were so badly written that it bugged me a lot
But meanwhile this one, shall I continue it?.