PLEASE HELP!

I'm trying to send this poem to my uncle, who is an English teacher, he has left, and I might never see him again, please help me add a few lines, of replace some of the words, because I think this poem looks so simple, also if I had any grammer mistakes, please tell me.
and tell me what do u think of it :)


a paper and a pen which writes in blue.

I hold it and think.
what should I do?

write about love?friends? of write about you?

the last thought was the best.
but where do I start?
I had no clue.

thoughts are many.
but words are few.

so I remembered the old days.
it was not a long time ago.

how u came to our house.
and how did u go.

I remember everything.
your face, smile, clothes, and even your shoe!

everything u zei was interesting.
and so funny too!

and within a few days only.
I realized
u are the best relative I've ever knew.

don't u believe me? I swear! it's true!
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I loved it all! except the shoot part ._.
InvaderStickly posted een jaar geleden
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"shoot" ?? I wrote "shoe"
hindaa posted een jaar geleden
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thank u all :) that's very nice of u :)
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irena83 said:
That's very nice of you. To send a message full of love and tenderness. Your poem is very sweet, don't worry, tho u may add some special moments of yours, something that will be memorized and cherished.
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i agree
chattycandy posted een jaar geleden
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thanks :)
hindaa posted een jaar geleden
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Thank you. ;)
irena83 posted een jaar geleden
CourtneyFan17 said:
I didn't read it sorry I got bored :P
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u r so mean :P
hindaa posted een jaar geleden
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Not trying to thats why I zei sorry :P
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chattycandy said:
it shows u love him and that u care.if u like it he will too.
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Words itself mean a lot. Honest and soft words always make everyone feel good.
irena83 posted een jaar geleden
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yeah
chattycandy posted een jaar geleden
booklover27 said:
AWSOME!! I loved it! there are no grammer problems that I can detect and sometimes the simplest things can be the best! I don't think u need to add anything, its sounds perfect and amazing! :)
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unless u want to add anything else of course! I agree with irena83's idea if u do :)
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thanks :)
hindaa posted een jaar geleden
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Yeah,simple and honest things mean a lot. The power and the depth is in words itself.
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