hallo Guys!! Here's some short songs I wrote....give me your opinions and suggestions...hope u like 'em

The first one is called 'Hi friend':
All the minuten I spent with u
were always what I wanted to do

When u were far away
Everyday I used to pray..For u to come back home..
For u to come back home...

SO Hi friend..Hi again
u really made me feel the pain
SO Hi friend..Hi again
u really made me feel the pain

When everybody left me alone
When everybody left me home
Anybody I wanted to find..Then I found u door my side..

SO Hi friend..Hi again
u really made me feel the pain
SO Hi friend..Hi again
u really made me feel the pain


The seconde one is The Sun Will Bright..it's a duet:


Guy:
Singing this song
Feeling alone
where all my vrienden are gone?
I tried to scream
I tried to fight
I tried to keep my head up high

Girl:
I know it's hard to be alone
I know it's hard to get along
u have to keep holding on
Cus..I'll help u to fight
I'll spend the night
With u door my side
The sun will bright

Guy:
I was alone
I was afraid
Until she came
Until she said

Both:
I'll help u to fight
I'll spend the night
With u door my side
The sun will bright

Both:
So if you're angry
If u wanna hide
Just keep smiling
Just keep trying
Cus the sun will bight...