HELP: wrinting a editorial for english needs to be 300-500 words i got 200 need meer ideas.

First of all, u should make it clear in the first place that you're writing this as an exercise of analyzing Jack Knowels' "A Separate Peace."

Secondly, I'm sorry, but I haven't read the novel, so I don't think I'll be of much help. Could u give me some background on the novel, maybe?

EDIT: I CAN help u with grammar.

"After some time home pagina Phineas returned, shortly after he returned he was questioned about his injury with all the confusion of what happened, Phineas ran out of the building and slipped on the steps."

You're a bit redundant here. Also, this is a run-on sentence. Change some commas to periods. Consider this bit, too: "After some time home pagina Phineas returned, shortly after he returned..." You're repeating yourself, see? I'd take out one of those clauses.

There are a few other redundancies in your text which I think you'll discover as u reread it.

As for suggestions to help make the piece meatier, u say a lot about what should be done but u don't explore how these things should be implemented. What if the school is short-staffed and can't spare teachers to watch kids at all times? What if they don't have the money to hire more? What do u mean when u say "teach students to be veilig and responsible"? veilig in what way? Will a meer structured lesson plan and less time to relax stress the students out more?

Also, u introduced the idea of blaming someone in your first paragraph, but never suggest who you, the editor, think should be blamed for the incident. u imply that it's the teachers and lack of supervision, but if this is really an editorial, your opinions should be far meer apparent and scathing. Think of yourself as a movie critic. Editorials are opinionated. They're one of the few pieces of journalism that's allowed to be opinionated. So... give your piece an opinion!