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a sneak peak of a story im making its called storytime... do u like it?

STORYTIME
Lily… will u tell me a story before I go to bed? I guess… what story? Not a real story in a book… we can make one up! Well… ok. Yay… thank u SO much!!! Your Welcome. Oh Yeah and door the way why do u like making up stories so much with me? ….. Caitlin??? Oh… sorry I just got tired. Ok, but this story HAS to be quick. Ok. Lily, can u start. Yes.
Once upon a time, there was a little girl named Caitlin and she was magic… she could do anything she wanted to whenever she wanted. She was the luckiest girl in the world.

What just happened Lily? I have no idea… I just turned magic. Hey… maybe… everything u tell me in the story comes true. Ok Lily… can u finish the story? Yes.

She could go to different places in less than 2 seconds!

Let me try. Ok. I want to go to Florida….. OH MY GOD… is this real? Am I actually in Florida. Yes. I want to go home! Ok now where back home. Lets finish the story. Ok.

Caitlin? Are u awake? I guess she isn’t awake.
Good morning Catlin. Good morning mommy! Come on u and Lily have to get ready for school. Ok. LILY WAKE UP!!! Ok mom, no need to be harsh! Ok miss smarty pants. Really mom, isn’t that saying from the 60’s of something? Fine don’t awnser me, but I know you’re just not awnsering me because u know im right. u ARE NOT RIGHT! Ok. Im done. u don’t have to announce that, Lily! Ok. Caitlin u are so lucky because mom is nice to u because you’re only 10 and she thinks that just because you’re younger that u should be treated better. Ok come on Caitlin I have to walk u to school. Ok.





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BaybieBetty009 said:
It's ok... u know? It's got potential and all. Didn't compmletely WOW me but it's alright. :)
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thanks
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OneFoggyNight said:
I think it could evolve alittle more,dont you? Like, detail, and maybe make it a bit slower.
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ok
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thanks 4 the tip!
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Always a pleasure ^-^
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