Princess-Flora I LOVE it

WinxStellaStar Thanks :) A little bit boring, but the next chapters will be exciting.

zikkiforever Great story!Fanned it!

WinxClub_Stella Great story but there are a few grammatical errors. Did you use Google Translate?

WinxStellaStar Thanks. :) Yes, a little bit I used Google Translator, but a large portion me translated. xD Sorry... What's the grammatical errors?

WinxClub_Stella Well here : [i]It was a beautiful Autumn day, in [b]the[/b] Alfea. Layla, Musa, Tecna, Flora, Stella and Roxy [b]was[/b] sitting in Bloom and Flora's room.[/i] No "the" and it would be "were sitting" [i]-Musa: Now, what we [b]waiting[/b]? [/i] I would put "what are we waiting for" [i]-Flora: [b]We waiting[/b] for Bloom. She said, [b]then[/b] she has got a surprise for us.[/i] "We are waiting" and "she said that she..." no comma [i]At this time Bloom [b]steps[/b] into the room.[/i] You're using past tense so it would be "stepped" [i]-Bloom: Well...I was talking with my adopted parents (Mike and Vanessa) and [b]they're[/b] said, [b]then theirs[/b] neighbor, my old friend, Samantha will have a Halloween party on Thursday, and [b]she invite[/b] us too. [b]Now, the invitation card arrived.[/b][/i] "They said" "that their" She's invited" I would put the next bit on the next line because it looks like Bloom said it. [i]-Stella: Hurray! [b]We go to a party![/b] What [b]I will[/b] wear? [b]Again we go as a fairy?[/b] [b]Or now we must wear a costume?[/b]....[/i] "We are going to a party" "What should I wear?" "should we go as a fairy again, or should we find other costume?" [i]-Tecna: Chill out! [b]You still decide this. ;) [/b] -Musa: [b]But it isn't will like Mitzi's Halloween parti?[/b] :S [/i] "We still have time to decide" "But what if this would be like Mitzi's party all over again?" [i]-Layla: It wasn't good. Mitzi and her friends [b]wanted to playing tricks to us[/b]....[b]They're[/b] dressed up [b]in [/b]ghost costumes. And [b]they're looked for theirs 4th little sister.[/b] "wanted to play tricks on us" "they" put that in in there "they pretended to look for their fourth sister" [i]-Stella: But at the end [b]we're playing tricks to they.[/b] Ha-ha-ha.[/i] "But in the end we ended up playing a trick on them" [i]-Roxy: But [b]what?[/b] [/i] "Where" Hope you can understand what I've put. It was very good but there were a few errors :D

XxXFloraXxX It's super!! Don't bother about the errors, the inside is all what matters :)

musa123s I like it

nmdis Nice work I'll say that we should bother about errors because not everyone of us mother language is English so there's no problem. And Mel why don't you message her. It won't make her embarrassed. Please prefer to message her instead of writing it here. Sorry Mel please don't get me wrong.

WinxStellaStar Thanks guys! Mel, thank you very much! Now, I know, what's my errors. :)

SummerThunder Agree with XxXFloraXxX.

WinxClub_Stella ^^@WinxStellaStar: sorry I posted the errors on here, sorry if you got embarrassed. I totally forgot about the meassging XD. @nmdis: It's cool :) @XxXFloraXxX: So inspirational :D

WinxStellaStar @WinxClub_Stella: Never mind. ;) No problem.