Writing Article: just a little thing i wrote for class...reviews, anyone?

just a little thing i wrote for class...reviews, anyone?

posted by ryans_love

Pride is a belief in myself (or someone else) that within me is something no one else has just like me. Pride can be a wonderful thing. My coaches are proud of me when I execute a verplaats perfectly. I am proud of my efforts when I get the right answer to a test question. However, pride can have a negative connotation. If I am prideful of my singing talent of of my sports accomplishments, then I am not feeling the right kind of pride. Yes, I can be pleased with my abilities; but when I let it go to my head, then I am full of pride, just like Odysseus often was. door believing that I am the only person with that talent, I inflate my ego. I believe myself to be “the best of the best,” and this can damage my relationships with others. They would not want my company if the only things I spoke of were my own accomplishments.

bri-marie Very good insight into how pride can be a negative thing, as well as a positive thing. Not very many people see that. The only problem I have is the first line has too many "me"s (myself, me and me) in it. It gets repetitive and, frankly, kind of annoying. Perhaps try rewording it to cut out one or two "me"s?

ryans_love thanks. i'll see what i can do.

The cover of Lala Magazine 5

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Forbidden Love (Character Guide)

posted by DxCFan123

What Kat, A.K.A. Kuro Neko, looks like in her human form.

Wow, I haven't been on here for a longgg while. Well, anyways, during that long time I was gone, I managed to write another story, this time it's influenced door my weeaboo-ness!

Anyways, this story is about a shinigami (grim reaper) that, for her final reaper test, is to spy on a boy for a jaar to decide whether of not he is to die.

ANYWAYYYYS

Now, to introduce the main main main characters, which is only 2 people!

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Name- Human name: Kat Chi ("chi" means blood in Jap.)
Shinigami name: Kuro Neko (black cat)

Age- Human years: 16
Shinigami years: 123

Death Sickle: A spear

Personality:...

Speechless Ch. 8

posted by para-scence

One day, I was watching the news. The stories presented on there were terrible. Death, crime, death, tragedy, death, hardship, death... It almost literally broke my heart.

"Oh, that's terrible," Mrs. Stueck sighed. I bit my lip. One vraag was still boiling in my mind. I took a deep breath.

"What happened," I squeaked. She stopped and looked at me.

"Excuse me?" she asked, confused. I took a deep breath.

"Averil," I said. She paused for a moment, and sighed sadly.

"She had a brain tumor. She died two years ago."

"Oh," I said. "S-s-sorry," I zei awkwardly. I didn't know what else to say.

"That's...

Interveiw with Alaina Cummings

posted by Cutebutcrazy--

I.    Book Title.
A.    Alice unknown
II.    Do u plan on writing meer books?
A.    Yes. I would like to write a sequel to Alice Unknown.
B.    I wanted Alice Unknown to be longer too.
C.    Also I would like my volgende to be meer dramatic.
D.    I have a 35 chapter book online too.
E.    And some anime.
III.    Any advice to anyone who wants to do something like this?
A.    Follow your dreams.
B.    Don’t...

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Quiet? Not anymore.

posted by twilight_23

This is a pesonal narrative I had to write for my English class. I love feedback, anything u have to say is appreciated. Also, if I made any mistakes (i.e. spelling, grammar, punctuation), please tell me so I can fix them, thanks:D

As I was thinking of experienes that changed my life, my mind automatically went back to my time at St. Anthony. I skimmed throught the years starting with eigth grade, thinking that was where I would find a significant event since it was where I have my most recent memories. To my surprise, I found nothing. I moved on to younger grade levels, still finding little....

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black moon readers!

posted by joe-edwardfan

i was just bored and i thought thats the same way edward feels towards bella so i just uploaded it! hope u like it!

hallo guys!
first of all i wanted to thank u all for the support over the 21 chaps.
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and i wanted to tell u that im gonna start a new story!(yay im so happy! im really getting addicted to fanpop)
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so im gonna give u some names u should pick one!(each name has a different story there not the same)
and im going to write my new story (the name most of u picked)
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so dont forget to tell me this really is important to me
so here are the names:

1.broken heart...

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OMG OMG OMG i found this written on my arm when i woke up!!!!!

posted by 1-2vampire

Darkest light, brightest sight
Midnight sky, Nyx's day
That navy ribbon shall lead the way
Full moon, Selene's sun
It soon shall be the only one...

heres another one

No red,
No yellow,
No blue,
No white,
Nature is gone,
The flowers are dead,
There be no meer light,
Black!
Everywhere around.
Scream!
There is no other sound.
All is lost.

And then another:

Fly,
So high,
HIgh as the sky,
Into seeping blackness.
No light is upon us,
And nothing is ever clear.
Diamond bright,
Beauty in there eyes,
The stars are alive.

AND THEN ANOTHER!!!!

Midnight sky,
Burning ice,
No more, no more, no more,
Say it thrice.
Light will be engulfed in a black haze.
We have gone through the Council's faze.

BLOODY HELL!!!!!!
what yu think it means?
yu think its a prophesy?
idk! HELP!!!! i sometimes write poems in my sleep!! i dont memba riting them but they in my handwriting!! TELL ME WHAT IS HAPPENING!!!!

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Broken Dreams Chapter 35

posted by BellaSwan636

Shaun

Four months. Four agonizing months since I had seen her in the park. Four agonizing months of starting to dial her number, and then stopping myself.

I am listening to the middle aged woman complain about her life. She doesn't even need a therapist.

I will the clock to verplaats faster. My office is dark, modern, and devoid of warmth. Ironically, it fits me.

Thankfully, the session is over. I tell Amamda that she's made progress, volgende week, and it's been a pleasure. Notice the lie. I glance down at the bureau calender, and look up 2:30.

I don't get a chance to see who is scheduled next, because...

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Tides (Short Story)

posted by Slinkywaffle

Tides
The sky was a canvas painted with pastels. Just before the sun truly zei goodbye, it hung in the sky. Her eyes sparkled and her hair shinned with the last light of day. Salt water filled her lungs as she took a deep breath. Sand began to cave in on her feet when she tried to verplaats them from where they were. She stared once meer at the now deserted strand and thought, maybe a little longer? But no, she couldn’t. She was too good to break her parent’s curfew, and with the first dag of school nearing, she knew she needed a good nights sleep. She slowly brought herself to her feet and grabbed...

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Bond--Chapter One: Kein

posted by -SilverFey-

I found my bond early.

Not exceptionally early. In eighth grade. I was thirteen; he was barely fourteen. And a matching mark appeared on our skin, meaning that he was my bond. He is my bond.

Our mark is made up of three dark black stars, charcoal black, pure black. The first one, the biggest star, is on both of our left breastbones, the seconde largest just under it and slightly to the left, and the smallest just a little lower down, directly under the first.

This year, tenth grade, I showed my mark to my teacher, Ms. Satari. She zei since it depicts something that exists only out of this world,...

Trapped

posted by liviabutterfly

Chapter [#1]

Number one description:

Okay so I'm this chapter it will be talking about the lives of the characters. So u can get a bit of background before I get to the true part of the story!!!! 😊

Love,

Liviabutterfly
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Olivia jones:

Olivia is a girl that lives with 5 other siblings, she's the youngest. Olivia is 16 and has 5 older brothers, Oliver, Owen, Oscar, Olly, and Omar. They live in a happy home pagina down near the beach, so they Jones family's favoriete thing to do is go on a boardwalk, swimming, laying out in the sun, collecting...

The Takeover (Things Get Out of Hand)

posted by vanelandsisters

By: Sonikku J. Aleena, Manikku J. Aleena, and Salamina Q. Acorn

Chapter 1
(Sonic's POV)
Two in the morning, I'm woken up door Dad and Stepmom. "Sonic, honey." She whispers to me. I sit up and look at her. "Yeah, what's up?" "Your father and I have to go on another business trip. Can u please tell Sonia that we'd like it if she could be in charge?" I nod, yawn, and hug them 'bye'. I eventually take out my 3DS and play one of my games on it. I'll say about three/four hours pass when I hear the front doors open. "Mom doesn't live here anymore," I think. "She lives at the hospital, and Dad and Stepmom...

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School Life

posted by Tia4

Most Irritating Moments
- Morning Alarm
Most Difficult Task
- To find Socks
Most Dreadful Journey
- Way to Class
Most Lovely Time
- Meeting Friends
Most Tragic Moments
- Surprise Test in 1st Period
Most Wonderful News
- TEACHER IS ABSENT

Maybe this happens with everyone.Nobody likes school life but it get interesting with our vrienden playing tricks with others,not doing homework,tests ect.We learn lots of things from school and we doesn't know how time get pass spending time with our friends.
It's fun.

The cover of Lala Magazine 2

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Dimension Jumper Ch 2

posted by jedigirl

D-Jumper Ch 2
"Ms. Sumter! Are u going to kom bij us?" I'm jolted back to reality door my English teacher.
"Yes. Sorry Sir." I apologize sheepishly. I hear a few snickers from my classmates. I hated this class so much.
I feel my phone buzz, and discreetly take a look. It was from Rocky, my best friend.

Hey, r u ok? U look out of it.

I look up at her and nod my head.
"Ms. Sumter! Pay attention. I will not tell u again!" Mr. Houseon scolded.
"Sorry," I apologize again. I give Rocky an accusatory look. She smiles in response. I sit and look at Mr. Houseon, not actually listening. My vision started to...

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I have no idea what to call this. O.O But it's chapter one.

posted by -SilverFey-

Just a few things before the story; one, if there's something u don't like about it, please tell me! I want it to be as good as it can be. ^-^ Just please tell me in a respectful way, please. I would appreciate that. Thank you.
Also, this story will be a little (well, meer than a little) bloody and violent, and there may be some cussing later on. Just a warning.
That being said, I hope u like it!
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Gnarled branches. Green leaves grew from them—green leaves spotted with yellows and reds. They rustled dryly, talking of the upcoming season of autumn....

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A Father's Love Letter

posted by MineTurtle

Just to let u know, this is NOT mine. I found it on another website.

My Child,

You may not know me, but I know everything about you. Psalm 139:1

I know when u sit down and when u rise up. Psalm 139:2

I am familiar with all your ways. Psalm 139:3

Even the very hairs on your head are numbered.
Matthew 10:29-31

For u were made in my image. Genesis 1:27

In me u live and verplaats and have your being. Acts 17:28

For u are my offspring. Acts 17:28

I knew u even before u were conceived. Jeremiah 1:4-5

I chose u when I planned creation. Ephesians 1:11-12

You were not a mistake, for all your days are...

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Millions Of Miles Apart

posted by malmcd

Millions of Miles Apart

From the moment your born somewhere out there u have a true love. At less that’s what they say? They say there’s one person who has the same hart-, hart strings as u and they complete you. And there’s nothing that can keep u apart from one another...But what if my one true love isn’t here? I mean what if I never find him of her if that’s the case which I hope it’s not. I don’t know what to say but I’m different from the rest...What if there’s no one out there for me?
My name is Sunflower I was born on the first dag of spring, March 20, 1998. And was born...

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.:~Water~:. (PLEEEEEEEEEZZZZZZZZEEEEEE READ!!!!!!!!)

posted by allicyn1234

Water
My only escape
Where for once my arms that are too pale and scrawny bend perfectly
Where I feel perfect
This is where my spirit will stay
When my body turns grey and dies away

Water
Where my legs that are too chubby of fat kick so strong
I feel perfect
This is the place my spirit will stay
When my body turns grey and dies away

Water
Where pain only makes me only go faster
Better
Prettier
Perfectly

Water
Where my face that's not pretty in never seen
Hidden in waves that make me feel free
This is the place my spirit will stay
When my body turns grey and dies away

Water
When I used to stab myself with needles
And let the blood bleed out
Suddenly is the last thing on my mind
And when I do spill blood
It's only on the days my mom says I can't go
To the water
Where my spirit will stay
When my body grows old and dies away

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Escape pt. 2

posted by alliXcobber

Chapter Two
Jessica lounged on top, boven of the Walgreen’s cash register counter.
    “So, do u even know what your’e going to do about your dad thing?”
    “Obviously, I’m doing just fine. I can live door myself until I turn 18,” Samantha told her, agitated that she was asking that stupid vraag again
    “You do know thats, like, illegal right?” Jessica countered in her annoying teenage girl accent.
    “Since when do people here care what’s legal of not?”
Jessica merely shrugged in response, they...