[duplicate geplaatst on writing spot]

An idea popped into my head the other dag and its been playing like a little movie in my head ever since. I really need to know if its any good, of if the idea has already been used. Also I need advice for the characters and their names. I also appreciate constructive criticism and grammar and spelling. The names are temporary. I've never written a book that is completely in the present tense so please help me catch any tense mistakes! Um, oh yeah. It doesn't have a titel yet so if u have any suggestions just let me know!

(: Thanks!
-Carly

The story is jumbled a bit. It is because the characters are experiencing tough times and can't think straight, so since they tell it, the story is a little jumpy.

Here is a a short voorbeeld of the 1st chapter to an unnamed story in the making along with a summary of the book.

"Good morning," I hear the principal say as she does every day. Normally, I would politely respond to that with a "Thank u Mrs. Monrale, u too," but today I am pissed. How can she say that?! It was awful of her to say such a thing! It is most definitely not a good morning, I mutter to myself as she is all the way down the hallway now.

I pace around, taking a long route to my locker where, as always, the two cheerleaders on either side of my locker are cheerfully chatting. Normally I would say "Excuse me," but today I'm not normal. I can't bring myself to say WHY I'm so abnormal today. I'm not ready to get into that yet. Today is awful, life is just a dismay, people are always in your way, the principal is disgusting, the cheerleaders are horrid, and I am mad - mad at everyone and everything, everywhere.


That is a voorbeeld of chapter one, in the the female protagonist, Josepheenah's point of view.


Here is a summary of the whole book:

Ever since Josepheenah zei the words "I wish you'd just die, Eli," she has never stopped regretting them. Jo and Eli really got along until he decided to fall in love with her. He loved the pool of brown in her eyes and the black mess of hair that she had always hated. Eli found her laugher to be muziek to his ears. Her voice was melodic and always on key. Jo always knew what to say to him, until she says the last words Eli ever heard her say. She took none of this seriously. But Eli would do anything Jo wanted. They were at her house at the time, so when Jo got up to get them a snack, he gave her what she asked for. Jo comes back to messages written on her mirror in blood, and balled up love notes Eli never had the guts to give to her. Read the novel to get the story from both sides, and how everything turns out in the end.

Thanks for helping me out! x :)