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hallo do u like this poem i did about alice and jasper's love?

these two were insepreable
the trust and love in his eyes
made her feel veilig
when she smiled
it brightened his dag
the thrill of the adventure
the adventure of love
was making alice and jasper
fall ever so passionetly inlove
love is like the wind
u cant see it
but u can feel it
love folowed jasper and alice
because they were destined for eachother

twilight_lover9 posted een jaar geleden

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TEAM-EDWARDxxx said:

I Like it...

But is okay i guess.. maybe sum meer stuff bout like Vampires haha that would be interesting..

posted een jaar geleden

u could just go to the request a peom vraag and say that u kno! but thanx! for the tip

twilight_lover9 posted een jaar geleden

Little_Cullen said:

LOVE it. Punctuation a bit funny, but the actual writing is really cool. I especially like the bit about he makes her feel veilig and her smile brightens his day. I love it. Keep it up!

posted een jaar geleden

thank-u so much

twilight_lover9 posted een jaar geleden

twilightgirlNo1 said:

i think its great but some of the lines could be a little better.

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twilight0girl said:

it's a perfect poem about them.

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Twilightpup said:

Its really good , u should make one about Bella and Edward

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emilyemmett said:

That is really good!! u should write another one!! Maybe about the meadow of Jacob and Renesmee of something!

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sessa123 said:

Its not bad, i always thought a poem used to jus have to rhyme but narr its really gud maybe fix up some little thing and maybe have a good thing to rhyme bout, like werewolves, vampires anything lol KEEP IT UP HUN XX

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